Thank you for the revised manuscript. I now have two reviewer's reports on the paper. Both agree that the paper could be publishable in ACP, but one reviewer in particular has identified that a great deal of work on the presentation is needed before this can be recommended. Please respond to all the points made by both reviewers in preparing a new version of the manuscript.

I have asked Dr Santee to have a look at this new manuscript, and am alarmed at the number of mistakes that she has found at this late stage of the review process. In particular I am concerned about the new errors that weren't there in the previous version of the manuscript.

I therefore ask you to address each of Dr Santee's points carefully, and to check the revised manuscript meticulously before resubmission. If major revisions are again required I will have to reject the paper.

Please address all the points made by Michelle Santee

Please address the following points in the revised manuscript:

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“The observational ΔIWC range between ΔIWCPrec and ΔIWCFlash, interpreted as the uncertainty of our model in estimating the amount of ice injected, is smaller over land (where the two relative differences between ΔIWCPrec and ΔIWCFlash agree to within +7 to -22%) than over ocean (where relative differences are between +6 and -71%) in the UT and TL.”
What does this mean? Should the brackets not read “(where ΔIWCPrec and ΔIWCFlash agree to within +7 to -22%)” and “(where differences are between +6 and -71%)”? What does the range +7 to -22% (and +6 to -71%) refer to? Do you actually mean “(where ΔIWCPrec and ΔIWCFlash agree to within 22%)” and “(where differences are up to 71%)”? This is what I understand from l. 577.

l. 132 ‘on the NASA website’ (not ‘in’), also give last access to website

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Location of 2°x2° pixels in Fig.4 where a) ΔIWC > 15 mg m-3 and f) 5 > ΔIWC > 2 mg m-3. Diurnal cycle of Prec (solid line) over 4 pixels (in Fig.4) where ΔIWC > 15 mg m-3 (b, c, d, e) and 5 > ΔIWC > 2 mg m-3 (g, h, i, j), during DJF 2004-2017. The diamond represents IWCMLS during the increasing phase of the convection. The dashed line is the diurnal cycle of IWC estimated from the diurnal cycle of Prec and from IWCMLS.

l.294 characterised (British spelling)

l.317 consistent (not consistently)

l.318 observed in

l.385 The China Sea